This is the first scene of my Drama, what do you say about it? Will you critique it

please.? SCENE I

Setting
Zahid with his brother, Jay, at their home. There is home construction in process. They both are rising walls of the room.
Dress
Both of them are in short trousers and they are without shirts. Audience can see the beauty of their fleshes.

Zahid
Did you observed, every in your life?
We’ve skill to make two plus two five
Jay
Yes, my respected big brother, its right
We can learn things just by their sight
Zahid
Mother told me, L.L.B you did clear?
The destination of your luck is near?
Jay
Its grace of god and our mother’s prayer
That we possess wisdom and don’t scare
From the storms and evils’ suffering
And we pass good life on little earning
Zahid
I would agree with your every word
Intention is the only thing in the world
Half the victory is your determination
Rest is noting to approach destination
Jay
Yes, and the things around us are codes
Made by people to increase mantel loads
I guess that the laws are to fix the nation
They set the objectives of civilized creation
Zahid
I object, not to all but the one, last line
Life is not only that you and I define
Morality is the key factor in humanity
Law is only to protect wild community
See the nations those have grown well
They kept the law limited into the cell
King will never talk of law but dignity
Dignity is superior over infinite flinty (hard)
Laws were misused in every age and time
Manners, etiquettes always remain fine
First is, to learn, how to bake the laws
So that there shouldn’t be left any flaws
In the formation of laws and its protocol
A mind must have an intellectual control
Jay
Your this speech sew my lips to utter
This utterance is evil’s mouth’s shutter
 
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