This is my first short-story/rant I've written in my journal! Do you see any

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writer-potential here? Maybe if I? practice a lot more? Thanks

"Low battery!" cries a flashing light on the bottom right corner of my computer screen. Well it only seemed like it was screaming hysterically because I knew that if I didn't get that plug into that damn outlet during heart-racing countdown of 20-or-so seconds, I would have to restart my computer, wasting about a good 10 minutes of my life for absolutely no respectable reason. As I dashed to the outlet- also in terror by the look on its face- I saw and searched but saw only darkness. A thickness of cloud, strangely dense. It was under my bed. Plug-Go-In. This angle. That angle. Shove. Shove. Shove. Goddamnit how hard can it be to match three sticks with three holes? I imagine, at this point, if sex is this diffucult in the dark. No possible way. Sexual organs are like magnets to eachother, knowing eachothers' locations by thhe gravity of lust...

I was just ranting and barely any editing as I copied it onto here. Maybe it sucks but I don't know! Do you see any potential for me in creative writing? I am generally a creative person in every other area and I thought maybe I should take up writing. Thanks soo much to those who help :)
 
You do have potential and I believe by practicing you will get better.

The best editor is often you. Read it back to yourself--out loud--and see if it flows.

This part makes no sense:
"As I dashed to the outlet- also in terror by the look on its face- I saw and searched but saw only darkness. A thickness of cloud, strangely dense. It was under my bed."

Don't change subjects within a paragraph.

These things you will learn with time and practice.
 
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