Dancemarcher
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*What do you think of this author's writing?
Lille clutched at the wall with her sweaty, clammy hands, trying not to pass out. Her surroundings were unfamiliar to her.
"I must be hallucinating," she thought. But she wasn't. This was real. Her mom was walking toward her, her arms open and tears streaming down her face. Except this wasn't the mom she remembered. Her mom had a warm demeanor like a crackling fire on a chilly day. This woman was whiter than a snowflake falling on the ground. Lille started shouting, but no words came out. She thought that she had gone deaf and mute at the same time. All she could hear was a familiar sound, so distant that it was barely recognizable. It would have been all for the better if this tune was indistinguishable. For, at that moment, Lille knew what it was as her mom clutched her with her thin hands. "Why are you doing this to me?" Lille shouted as she realized that her voice had come back to her.
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I couldn't add paragraphs, but the author did have them. My computer was being funky so I couldn't tab.
Haha. Vaporey, I was just wondering what you thought. It's MY writing. I didn't want you being nice because you'd be talking to the one who wrote it so I was trying to act like it was someone else's writing. Guess it didn't work.
Lille clutched at the wall with her sweaty, clammy hands, trying not to pass out. Her surroundings were unfamiliar to her.
"I must be hallucinating," she thought. But she wasn't. This was real. Her mom was walking toward her, her arms open and tears streaming down her face. Except this wasn't the mom she remembered. Her mom had a warm demeanor like a crackling fire on a chilly day. This woman was whiter than a snowflake falling on the ground. Lille started shouting, but no words came out. She thought that she had gone deaf and mute at the same time. All she could hear was a familiar sound, so distant that it was barely recognizable. It would have been all for the better if this tune was indistinguishable. For, at that moment, Lille knew what it was as her mom clutched her with her thin hands. "Why are you doing this to me?" Lille shouted as she realized that her voice had come back to her.
* 1 day ago
* - 3 days left to answer.
Additional Details
I couldn't add paragraphs, but the author did have them. My computer was being funky so I couldn't tab.
Haha. Vaporey, I was just wondering what you thought. It's MY writing. I didn't want you being nice because you'd be talking to the one who wrote it so I was trying to act like it was someone else's writing. Guess it didn't work.