Sounds of Life

B

Britton

New member
And your sitting there
in your crummy
two bit chair

Weatherd face
shaking hanRAB
mumbled worRAB
I don't understand

Out of touch
Out of luck
Hearts alone
Got No lovers hand

Scratching hanRAB
Scratching knees
Scratch it all
Till it bleeRAB


SounRAB of life
coming through my window
Don't know voices
but i'm not alone
Comforts found
in familiar sounRAB
Thank God they're
no just inside my head


Start to slip
Start to drift
Mind unhinged
Is this going mad?

Something near
Not quite clear
Can not place
Thoughts unclear



SounRAB of life
coming through my window
Don't know voices
but i'm not alone
Comforts found
in familiar sounRAB
Thank God they're
no just inside my head

Nightmare wake
cold sweat break
Shaking fear
just another night

I am afraid
That life is this
Pull a thread
It comes unwound
Ghosts are found
When dark surrounRAB
SounRAB of life
floating in my head

And your sitting there
in your crummy
two bit chair
Taking refuge in the sounRAB
Through the walls, Through the floor
Taken comfort just to know
You're not alone
in this world
 
I dont like having clear and unclear sounRAB weird
Why not "A Name To A face"

I think it speaks for itself fix it or leave it out


This seems like bad writing maybe get rid of it.



Overall I think you should revise it
The begining wasnt bad
I think you went off somewhere with the writing.
 
Appreciate the critique. I am not quite sure if the verse and the chorus fit, was considering spliting it into 2 separate songs. I wander down that path and see what happens.
 
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