HollyMarie
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"I desire to work in a management position within a non-profit organization because I want a career that allows me to make a positive difference in our community, while at the same time being able to support myself."
I am writing something for graduate admissions, and something just seems wrong about this sentence. I can't put my finger on it. Help?
This is the part that doesn't sound right to me:
"while at the same time being able to support myself."
But I'm not sure what it should be instead...
I am including supporting myself because of the fact that many people aspire to work in non-profits, but are never able to completely support themselves because there are too many volunteers for the grunt work. Thus the need for an advanced degree in order to actually turn it into a career.
I am writing something for graduate admissions, and something just seems wrong about this sentence. I can't put my finger on it. Help?
This is the part that doesn't sound right to me:
"while at the same time being able to support myself."
But I'm not sure what it should be instead...
I am including supporting myself because of the fact that many people aspire to work in non-profits, but are never able to completely support themselves because there are too many volunteers for the grunt work. Thus the need for an advanced degree in order to actually turn it into a career.