someone please read my poem and tell me if its good or not, i wrote it in a...

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...time of despair. please answer? Woe is I, to be born into this century of deceit.
I was running from my fears when I slipped on my own two feet.
And now I'm falling, crawling, spiraling down;
hating everybody in this stupid, little town.
Every solitary moment takes away a part of me.
I try to hide pain but it's clear for the whole world to see.
Every breath I take breaks my heart,
and so I fake a smile as I'm falling apart.
The gun calls my name
as everyone looks down at me in disdain.
and I hate myself for not answering it's call.
I tried so hard to be "good enough"
I loved you; even after I caught your bluff..
and in the end, you didn't even care.
I cried for you but it was like I wasn't even there.
To you, I am invisible.
From guilt, you are invincible.
You ripped my heart out and burned it at the stake.
Your intensity was too much for me to take.
You've wounded me and I can't stop the bleeding.
If only I was brave enough to stop my heart's beating.
I built up a million walls for every single doubt,
and I only did it as an attempt to shut you out.
All I had was you and I lost you forever.
Happiness will come to me, never.
My eyes cause me agony every time they meet yours.
My soul is screaming for those burned bridges and closed doors.
 
It was amazing. Very emotional, kinda depressing but it's good that you're letting your feelings out. I loved it. :D
 
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