should i give my boyfriend this poem that i wrote about him?

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Craddled in my palms
I wish that I could trap you
Hold you under lock and key
the way I feel is nearly undesirable
vulnerable, even lonely
ive never felt lonelier in my life
then when im not beside you
next to you, underneath you
as long as I can touch you
that’s when I breathe
the barriers, the strangers talking
the outside world is dulled
and waves of sound are silenced
by your lips,
your hands
most of all your heart
 
This is by far the biggest piece of crap I've ever read. First you need some grammar lessons, and then you need to look up the definition of 'crazy stalker girl' because this guy isn't your boyfriend and he doesn't even know that you exist. If you give this to him he will get a restraining order for sure.
 
this is beautiful but how long have you been with him what if he understands everything what you meant word by word.
he might take u for granted...if u dont know if u should give it to him u prolly shouldnt becasue it sounds like u r the one trapped by him
 
I'd be the happiest dude in the world right now, if that poem were meant for me... your bf's gonna love it...no f***in joke.
 
this is really really nice. I wish i could come up with something like that for my bf.
 
this is really really nice. I wish i could come up with something like that for my bf.
 
awe! Thats cute, go for it:)


answer mine?
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index?qid=20081110224618AAmVB6F&r=w
 
It sounds a little desperate/needy. No offense. But it's a good poem...very emotional.
 
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