Revised poem from earlier....Any better?

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Okay, I wrote this poem earlier, and I'm only 13. I posted the other version, and people said it was too long, so I cut it in half. Is it till too long? Please comment and give reasons why. Thanks.
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Depending on

your point of view,

many things

can be seen

differently.

Either we

are like many,

or we are

all different.



Like many,

I have a body



But, unlike many,

or even all,

it's mine,

and no one elses.



Unlike many,

even all,

I have two eyes,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

a nose,

and it's mine,

and no one elses.

two ears,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

a mouth,

and it's mine,

and no one elses.

a face,

and it's mine,

and no one elses.

a head,

that is like no other.



Unlike many,

even all,

I have a neck,

and it's mine,

and no one elses.

two shoulders,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

a torso

that is like no other.



Unlike many,

even all,

I have two bicepts,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

two elbows,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

two fore-arms,

two arms

that are like no other.



Unlike many,

even all,

I have two wrists,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Two palms,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Ten fingers,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Two hands

that are like no other.



Unlike many,

even all,

I have a waist,

and it's mine,

and no one elses.

Two hips,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Two thighs,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Two knees,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Two calves,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Two legs

that are like no other.



Unlike many,

even all,

I have two ankles,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Ten toes,

and they

are mine,

and no one elses.

Two feet

that are like no other.



So whether

your glass is

half empty,

or half full

can change

many views.

Do you live

to be alike,

or live

because you are alike.

Or, do you

live to be different,

or live because

you are diffent?



I have just

one, simple answer.



You are yourself

and always will be

no matter what

change or stage

you go through,

or even if

you are a twin.



My answer

is that I am just simply

Taylor, and

always will be

no matter what

view you have.
 
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