READ! First song that i wrote! finished from yesterday! feedback please!:)?

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Daniella

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Yesterday was the first time i have ever written a song. I'm new to all this.. so if you can give me some feed back, i'd really appreicate it:) tell me what to improve and change and what would u rate it out of 10? thanks i appreciate it:)


TITLE: Never Another Spark

I gave you the very best of me
You can't give me what I need
All I wanted was for you to be right there
Now I see you don't even care

I'm here crying for you honey and you don't even know
Yeah you don't even know

CHORUS
That I loved you with everything I had
Now there's not going back, yeah aint it sad
With all this pain, how could you leave me in the dark
It's hard to believe there will never be another spark

It's like I don't know who you are
I guess that's why we had to fall apart
You said you loved me but i can tell when you lie
It feels that there's apart of me that has died

You're here lieing to be honey, and you don't even know
You don't even know

CHORUS
That I loved you with everything I had
Now there's not going back, yeah aint it sad
With all this pain, how could you leave me in the dark
It's hard to believe there will never be another spark

This break is making me stronger
My heart can't take it no longer
I dare you to ask for one more chance
No way in hell will i ever glance back at you...

You're here begging for me honey, and you don't even know
You don't even know

CHORUS
That I loved you with everything I had
Now there's not going back, yeah now I'm glad
With all this pain, how could you leave me in the dark
Now I beleive there will never be another spark
oohh yeahh.. never another spark

thanks for your time:)
the bridge is the im here crying for you honey part..
i think.. haha im new to this!!
and thanks guys it means a lot to me:)
and YES COUNTRY MUSIC IS AWESOME!
 
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