Pulse

[Nicholas A]

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[smashlee_1014]

brilliant as always (usual)

 

[siqqq6]

Its good but to be honest you used "Twilight" and "The Moon" in the same line,
Hurts my feelings really.

 

[Manshi]

i'm worried that there may be some ill-logic in there somewhere that would make it confusing. i'm also thinking it esp the first 4 lines may be overly grandiose and out of fashion, off-putting. i'm worried about some lines being ineffectual. and as always i'm worried about cliches, the biggest pitfall. also maybe excessive commas mess up the rhythm.

 

[Riku]

I think you criticized yourself quite well, Even if it is a bit harsh. I like your ending a lot. Shapeless is a sexy word to use at all times.

 

[Marin3 muscl3]

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[mickeylynn1999]

your writing is getting so solid
it's spacey in my favourite way