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Juan J.

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A noise emerged out of nowhere it was robotic like, my eyes were shut to the point were all i saw was black
I felt a liquid pouring on my body starting from my head down it was warm and cool at the same time the machine
said please do not move you have awoken from cryogenic sleep you may feel strange in the first few minutes perhaps say where am I and what am I doing here please once you exit you will be given an advance model trainer and you will be the trainee so behave and follow instructions. 5 beeps came near my ear then a bursting air followed from every part of my body it was strange I then felt as if I were thrown on the ground I felt numb it felt cold then i felt someone carry me like something I didn't know where I was headed it all felt strange "agh fuck" I could speak now
"shit it burns" damn it felt like i was being burned alive it felt like liquid magma? no wait water "aaah it felt refreshing now" wait what I feel like I've been turned around now for the front "no what aaah damn it" I have a bad feeling for this "AAAAGHH IT burns Fuck erghhhh" some thing spoke I could finally open my eyes but i was unable to move
I saw a robotic arm with something brown and a clear thing around it oh a contact lens? "hmm must be some futuristic device my eyes seemed more advanced" whoa i said lights emerged right in front of me like i could touch them
it read Booting in the center of my eyes then i saw something in my left eye like a visualization i saw every thing that happened in my life I remembered everything from the time I was born to the time I entered my sleep chamber

Now i could finally move i stood up moved every part of my body stretched every muscle I looked in the mirror
I still looked the same hmmm I was wondering "where are my clothes".
 
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