powdered inks and budding seeds

Thanks for your childish response even though it's not worth much =/

It's spoken word by the way, there is not music too it.
 
Skinfish's response was indeed childish and i'd ignore it.

Parts of this were quite good, but the layout didn't do it much favours, it was a daunting task to read. If it were me, i'd definitely break it all up into smaller lines and perhaps strip some of the unnecessary worRAB.

Most of the rhymes weren't that garish and the writing certainly didn't rely on them. Quite a few clich
 
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