Poetry critique please...anything is appreciated?

flippinskippy8

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The World I See
By Tyler...


A few words to mark the occasion.
For the end, no the beginning,
My mind wanders for the moment
I cant think of anything…

The World I See,
Is Dark yet free and complete,
Is silent forever lost in oblivion,
Where the loss of hope is freedom,
And I am it’s smirking revenge.

In the World I see,
Only when everything is lost,
Can anything be done,
Where even perfection is flawed,
And I am it’s complete lack of surprise.

In the world I see,
Nothing is great and depression is life,
Life itself is ending in every moment of time,
Fear of death are near-life experiences,
And I am it’s cold sweat.

In the world i see,
Panic becomes the euphoria of fate,
Blank faces waiting for disaster,
For only disaster brings resurrection,
And I am it’s wasted life.

the world i see,
Is the destruction of all things beautiful,
Is letting things that truly matter fade,
Where freedom is a slave to hope,
And I am it’ broken heart.

The World I See is no world at all,
It is the world that you live in,
Or the vision of hell that many call.
Your decision will determine this rise or fall.

A few words to mark the occasion?
I still can’t think of anything…
And yet I am the deciding factor,
That dooms this world I see...for us all.
 
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