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yet again another poem feel free to rate it or rip it up to change it (repost it pls) or give suggestions

as i write in my book
i think of all the things she took
things that can't be returned
things that must be relearned

she took my love and all my joy
she used my heart like a toy
but to her i hold no hate
for this was just an act of fate

yet the memory of her won't fade away
so in my book it will stay
upon the ink ridden pages of my mind
she's the only thing you will find
 
Awe, that's really good. (: Just try using more punctuation (Commas, Periods, etc.) It'll make it look more professional. Good job, though!
 
It's a simple poem. The message is easy to follow, the rhyme scheme and meter were evenly carried throughout. But it's too emo-ish for me, and there are very few symbols and imagery. Not bad, though.
 
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