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Black Heart

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There is a life there in heaven.
when i sing for you and me
if life was never good to us
in heaven it will be
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i will run through meadows
i will sing so loud and clear
i will fly so free from tears
without sting of fear
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i know life is short and narrow
full with pain and harm
i know for sure its a sad trip
but i will die so calm
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i fetch a rose in heaven
and let dangle bewteen my hands
its what i always want
to let it take my palm
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what if we never laugh here
what if we never smile
in heaven there will be
a melody of laughters to hear
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heaven will be so happy
full with spring and fun
breeze will play with our hair
instead of wind in hearts
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there will be end for misery
there will be for sure
i trust god is good to us
to put us in hell again
 
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