Please critique my poem! Is it good? Please excuse any spelling errors...?

Bay Raymond

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With only the light from our candle,
We venture onword into a world left for us
Forlorn souls with no where to go
Left in ruins
A place once called home
but now a community lost without a single trace
We rove around with nothing more than a candle
Forlorn souls sining a song 'bout plentiful feilds of grain
We Desrted our minds for maybe just a sencond
The Forgotten souls of disspear singing a song of hope
The lonesome home once in ruins now filled with hope
Green plants slither out of the dusty ground
Fresh water flows into the parched river
Sun shines through the clouds of endless parrel
And now we leave with only a candle in hand
We venture into a world we know too well
ummm yeah...but change it up abit...if you don't mind...thanks!
Sorry wrong section...
yeah i posted a revised one...on the poem section...cuz this is books and authors...
Yeah sorry about the spelling...like I said...there's a revised one I just posted...go to my profile(Q/A) and you'll find it I guess....
Yeah I know it's books and Arthurs...I clicked on the submit button before I knew...I clicked the wrong section....
 
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