please comment these poems?!?

BeccaBabeee.

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well i also need some ideas for one as you can see.




L is for the light you bring to my day.
O is for the
V is for the vow to stay with me
E is for every wonderful minute




H is for the hurt you gave me.
E is for the emptiness you left inside me.
A is for the anger you made me feel.
R is for the rain i cried in so you couldnt see.
T is for the torture you put me through.
B is for the bed in what you did.
R is for really trying to make it happen.
O is for the only person i want/ed.
K is for keeping me in the dark.
E is for the end of everything.
N is for trying never to lose hope.



As you can see for the first one i still havent finished i need some ideas for the 'O'.


Thanks in advance.=]
i wrote them by myself. i am 13 and never writen poetry before im really proud of myself:)
 
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