Please comment on my poetry. What do you think of it?

[God_save_the_queen]

You caught me in a dream world.
You looked me in the eye.
You said when I awoke my soul would die.
You said I'd be alone standing out on my own.
In a life I never knew.
To take me threw my memories and burn them all to crisps.
You sent me off without my last words.
Into a lonely fake and dangerous world.

 

[Alec G]

Its kind of depressing, but its good. Its the kind of poetry that critics like if your going for a career in it. See, that's what I like: Poems that aren't just about simple rhymes and lines. The intellegent work put into is what matters

 

[Cordy Doyle]

Its sad...

 

[your momm]

I think it's shit. You're writing down thoughts without any relevance to anything and it just makes you seem like a teenager in puberty. You can learn, but it will take practice and thinking. Can you do that? think?