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I just posted one, and it received, so far good reviews, so here is another one, this one I made after I saw something that made me laugh, if any can tell me where I got the name for this poem will increase your chances of getting best answer, but I still want a well thought out review, and critique.
It's Alright Ma
With every second, is another grain of sand gone,
It never stops, not day not night, not dusk, not dawn.
It's alright ma, I'm only dieing.
With every breath I take, it's another lie I speak,
It begins a white one, and it doesn't end till its higher than the mountains peak.
It's alright ma, I'm only lying
With every thing I touch, just another thing I broke,
It is fine then I make it go into a puff of smoke.
It's alright ma, I've stop trying.
With every thought I think, it another sin,
It could be lust, it could greed, it might be pride, that's just hows it's been.
Maybe it's not alright, ma.
All I got was the title, and part of it for the last line of each verse, "It's alright ma". I have never heard this song, hand on the bible, I just wrote that and it sounded like a good way to end the verse. If that is indeed what Bob, said then I will have to listen to it, seems the times are a changing.
It's Alright Ma
With every second, is another grain of sand gone,
It never stops, not day not night, not dusk, not dawn.
It's alright ma, I'm only dieing.
With every breath I take, it's another lie I speak,
It begins a white one, and it doesn't end till its higher than the mountains peak.
It's alright ma, I'm only lying
With every thing I touch, just another thing I broke,
It is fine then I make it go into a puff of smoke.
It's alright ma, I've stop trying.
With every thought I think, it another sin,
It could be lust, it could greed, it might be pride, that's just hows it's been.
Maybe it's not alright, ma.
All I got was the title, and part of it for the last line of each verse, "It's alright ma". I have never heard this song, hand on the bible, I just wrote that and it sounded like a good way to end the verse. If that is indeed what Bob, said then I will have to listen to it, seems the times are a changing.