Night Hike, need your input (on this poem)?

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In dusk my insides were laughing at the crackling leaves
I was the lone wolf
with the close skin of my brothers
and the waving hair of my sisters
we held hands
bumped shoulders in the forest
and all around us the kaleidoscope moved
to the music of our thoughts
and as the darkness began to creep through our skin
we emerged in a clearing
into the heavenly light of stars
dead and alive
on our faces like shadows
it was as if the gods reached out and touched us
reached out and kissed us
and like that
we became like animals
hooting, trilling and cawing at the moon
hugging each other
dancing
laughing
forever laughing
and all the darkness shivered
 
I loved the originality, musicality, and imagery! It's very good. The last part 'dancing/ laughing/
forever laughing /and all the darkness shivered' is dramatic. Good job!
 
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