Need some feedback on lyrics?

MaraMelodiee

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Why are you still breathing
Why are you still with the living

Mirrors send shivers through my spine
I can't look inside them, I can't look around them
Because your everywhere, your everywhere
Why is this the person im meant to be, why?

You murdered an innocent girl long ago
Before you, she didn't know deceit and misery
You tormented her, it was constant agony
She stepped aside, and left you in control
what you are, even I don't know anymore
But you are what is behind my being

a curious choice I know you are
You broke the wings that could have lifted me far
As I lay in grief of that young girl
I know she had to pass someday
But I would capture her in a crystal prism
to stay with me in any way

You poisoned tongue taught me
Your tainted mind destroyed me
And your broken heart broke me
Your vows captured me
You convinced me I was to be great
I was to be great, the greatest
When realized you were lying to me
I fell so hard, I hit the glass so hard

It splintered and fell into her eyes
I blamed myself, you and your crystalline lies
I can see still see her face
it's so vivid in my memories, I used to smile
and laugh with the others.
Before my fall from grace

I fell into rose bushes with nothing but thorns
before my fall from grace, i knew how to love
I knew joy and pain in equal measure
I didn't know a grimace was soon to be the extent of my pleasure

She sees no dreams
shes the living dead, risen from her grave
Her final dreamless bed.
One day she will join the rest of herself
She'll see the person shes become and she'll save me
from myself. I can't hate silently any longer
Each day the pain intensifies and grows stronger

Come to me
Come to me
Come to me
Join me


Thanks for answering
*When I realized you were lying to me*
 
Wow! thats done really great.
Only one thing I would change as it doesnt seem in place.
"what you are, even I don't know anymore"
I would take out "even"
 
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