my poem need some changes?

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alright i gotten this much down in my head.

Please feel free to change anything u might not like in the poem. and don't make it to strong i don't want to scare her. o.o (Btw her name evelyn)

I don't know u well, but what i do know haunts me. your looks is like no one else seeing your dark black eyes send me deep inside my self. Seeing your shinny flowing dark black hair in the sun glares were i can't see anymore. Hearing your voice takes me to a place were there's no worries and a place were i can relax. It's amazing how I feel when I'm around you,
How my heart pounds when you come into a room.

Don't like it? help me change it thanks guys!
 
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