My newest poem is worth 20 points?

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Ok so I want you to tell me if you like it or dislike it, but I don't just want that. I want you to tell em why.

I chose not to use verses
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I see the light right there ahead of me. Maybe now I can finally be free. Crawling through sadness and pain. Please don't tell me all we've done was in vain. Down so deep away from the sun. Poking my hand through the dark...I think I've won. Grabbing hands pulling back on me. Shouts and screams wont let me be free! Every time I reach the light. You roar back, Your black heart blinding my sight. You won't let me be free, and that will be the death of me.

If you can tell me what its about I'll give ya 20 points.
Nope keep trying
 
ok, 1st wow that's pretty intense. i personally think that's its about a break-up. with a girlfriend that just wouldn't let you go. i don't know who broke up with who, but that's what it sounds like to me. and she just wouldn't let you get on with your life, she tried to text you and call you like every day!.....

I see the light right there ahead of me. Maybe now I can finally be free. : that you are finally going to get on with your life you will be free and not have to worry about her.

Crawling through sadness and pain. Please don't tell me all we've done was in vain: right here it makes me think that she broke u with you because you are crwaling through sadness and pain. and you are kinda disappointed that she did all this with you just to mess with your heart :'(


Down so deep away from the sun. Poking my hand through the dark...I think I've won: like you havent done anything much because you are too sad and mad at her. and you are starting to get over it and you think that you won over her wrath.

Grabbing hands pulling back on me. Shouts and screams wont let me be free!: she is trying to not let you have your life and pulling back on you and not leting you do anything. and she is just causing you to not be able to do anything.

Every time I reach the light. You roar back,: i really like this line! ok when you finally start to get over her and all of her drama. she kinda starts to pull you back in.


Your black heart blinding my sight. You won't let me be free, and that will be the death of me.: she will not let you go she is just holding you in and she screwed up your life.


i hope this is right!! 20 points pleaseee!!
 
Well i guess it could be about someone who is in love and sees that person and then that one person brakes your heart as if you were a piece of trash on the road. It was just a guess
 
Sounds a little like sexie time XD

No, seriously. It sounds like you have been through a committed relationship and then either one of you ends up rubbish in bed and you don't want to be with each other anymore...

That's my portrayal of it anyway, haha
 
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