I started writing this, it was going to be a song but somehow turned into a poem. I have never written a poem before, its probably pretty obvious what it is really about.
Anyway I would appreciate some feedback...be kind!
The Puzzle
Through blackened reds, through shielded view
Lay circles of electric blue
In the flames of warm shifting lights
You lay exposed. Shining
The missing piece that I desire
Finally I have found
Everything seems perfect…everything
Seems perfect
And as a feel you in my hand
Your whites, blues and reds glow bright
For your value is ever growing
As your colours merge. Take flight
But it seems your colours are imprisoned
Mired and framed in a haze like black
Preventing lights from shining through
And hiding the secrets that are held back
But this jigsaw piece is a perfect fit
Yet my picture remains incomplete
Sugar pills lead to uncured ill’s
Do you ever fell like something’s…missing?
The haze is unrelenting
As it swirls engulfing deep
The dark it screams ‘relinquish!’
‘Make these colours sleep’
Puzzle piece, you are strong!
And only you can make your colours fly
I know I must hand you back
Only you can clear the black
I’m saddened as you slip from my fingers
But I realise
Even though I wish to keep you
Only you can clear the fog that lingers
So whilst this piece is hazy
My puzzle stays incomplete
Until you can reveal to me
The truth locked in it
But know I’ll keep my puzzle safe
Until your colours can shine through
Then maybe one day
It will be completed with you
Anyway I would appreciate some feedback...be kind!
The Puzzle
Through blackened reds, through shielded view
Lay circles of electric blue
In the flames of warm shifting lights
You lay exposed. Shining
The missing piece that I desire
Finally I have found
Everything seems perfect…everything
Seems perfect
And as a feel you in my hand
Your whites, blues and reds glow bright
For your value is ever growing
As your colours merge. Take flight
But it seems your colours are imprisoned
Mired and framed in a haze like black
Preventing lights from shining through
And hiding the secrets that are held back
But this jigsaw piece is a perfect fit
Yet my picture remains incomplete
Sugar pills lead to uncured ill’s
Do you ever fell like something’s…missing?
The haze is unrelenting
As it swirls engulfing deep
The dark it screams ‘relinquish!’
‘Make these colours sleep’
Puzzle piece, you are strong!
And only you can make your colours fly
I know I must hand you back
Only you can clear the black
I’m saddened as you slip from my fingers
But I realise
Even though I wish to keep you
Only you can clear the fog that lingers
So whilst this piece is hazy
My puzzle stays incomplete
Until you can reveal to me
The truth locked in it
But know I’ll keep my puzzle safe
Until your colours can shine through
Then maybe one day
It will be completed with you