My first attempt at poetry, what do you think?

J

--JoeWade--

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The Rhythm of Life

The Ignorant, not taught the words,
The intelligent, to busy talking their own.
Out of tune or deaf?

Trees of purple
Agreeing in silence
Buddhas, Beats covered in leaves,
Swaying to the sound with the wind.

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The barber shop singers
Simultaneously swallowing the sky,
Pondering their next venue

City dogs chanting on balconies
Yodeling on rooftops
Dancing with cats
Crying for an oncore.

Sitting on the evening sun,
Wise pocket-less men
Tapping out clouds
With happy feet


( Its a working progress )

What do you think , it is my first go at poetry, so I don't expect an applaud, but some constructive advice would be splendid
 
You have significant potential (in my opinion) and I love your use of seemingly unrelated metaphors to paint a vivid picture. Life is and has rhythm which is evident in your work.

Kudo's.......
Keep writing.
 
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