luv_2_homeschool
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I have never been interested in poetry, until 2 days ago. Now all of the sudden I have a new found love of the art. Tonight I have written many poems, and I want some feedback, constructive criticism, and just to know what you think.
The perfect love story.
I know I cannot have you now
No matter what I do
I don't know if I will ever
Mean that much to you
I know that you're my friend
And in it 'till the end
But how close can it get
because I know you don't forget
And I'm not the only one
I guess she's just to fun
And I've been over done
We fought, and then she won
So now she has the prize
And you get all her lies
But does she even know
Our friendship still could grow?
And together we will be
The perfect love story.
I probably won't.
Why can't I just tell him,
How I really feel?
And how come i can't tell him,
that he makes my life surreal?
What he doesn't know,
is what i cannot say.
When i bring myself to tell him,
that will be the day.
Maybe i am wrong,
to keep it to myself.
Just maybe its untrue
to leave my love on a shelf.
I wish that I could tell him,
so our friendship could be more,
so he could hold me close and say,
I will always be yours.
We talk, we fight, we joke, and play,
But I really want him every day,
I want to be more than friends,
don't want all this to fade away.
I wish I had the confidence,
geuss what? I really don't,
wish I could tell him how I feel
geuss what? I probably wont.
The worst is not knowing
I hate mosquitos and traffic jams
and the end of a great book
broken pencils and ripped paper
and carrots and chances not took.
but really what I hate the most
is not knowing how you feel
or if my heart is running wild,
if love is even real.
By my side
she is my best friend
shes been there through it all
always by my side
to help me when i fall
we are kept from being together
but when we are apart
i still know she's always there for me
'cause she has been from the start.
"the worst is not knowing" is the name of another poem. So that's 2 different poems. Thanks for letting me know you liked it!
The perfect love story.
I know I cannot have you now
No matter what I do
I don't know if I will ever
Mean that much to you
I know that you're my friend
And in it 'till the end
But how close can it get
because I know you don't forget
And I'm not the only one
I guess she's just to fun
And I've been over done
We fought, and then she won
So now she has the prize
And you get all her lies
But does she even know
Our friendship still could grow?
And together we will be
The perfect love story.
I probably won't.
Why can't I just tell him,
How I really feel?
And how come i can't tell him,
that he makes my life surreal?
What he doesn't know,
is what i cannot say.
When i bring myself to tell him,
that will be the day.
Maybe i am wrong,
to keep it to myself.
Just maybe its untrue
to leave my love on a shelf.
I wish that I could tell him,
so our friendship could be more,
so he could hold me close and say,
I will always be yours.
We talk, we fight, we joke, and play,
But I really want him every day,
I want to be more than friends,
don't want all this to fade away.
I wish I had the confidence,
geuss what? I really don't,
wish I could tell him how I feel
geuss what? I probably wont.
The worst is not knowing
I hate mosquitos and traffic jams
and the end of a great book
broken pencils and ripped paper
and carrots and chances not took.
but really what I hate the most
is not knowing how you feel
or if my heart is running wild,
if love is even real.
By my side
she is my best friend
shes been there through it all
always by my side
to help me when i fall
we are kept from being together
but when we are apart
i still know she's always there for me
'cause she has been from the start.
"the worst is not knowing" is the name of another poem. So that's 2 different poems. Thanks for letting me know you liked it!