Is this bad poetry. I'm not much of a writer, obviously. It's a little dark.?

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Rhi

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My mind is a cesspool feeding on negativity
I'm slowly feeling numb to every word that slips out of my mouth
My pain has become my addiction
I maintain my existence through suffering
My life is slipping right through my fingers and I'm far to gone
My existence is broken; I am broken


It's a little morbid, but I've been feeling quite depressed lately, and I normally don't write because I think I suck!
I wasn't quite done with it yet. I'm just experimenting, and I thought I would wright my emotions down.
 
I can see you're not feeling the best, and that your vocabulary is well enough to express yourself. However, i don't feel like what you've written is what you're REALLY feeling. it seems to be sentences that don't really make sense, and that everyone else writes. Try not to rhyme, have rhythm or anything. just free right and work from there. You'll find you'll learn things about yourself and be able to easier translate your thoughts.

Good luck =] writing is a really good way of...a lot of things.
 
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