This is my first poem ever. So don't be too harsh.
My life seems incomplete without your enticing voice.
You're presence intoxicates me,
its like dying and coming back to life,
you being the one I see first.
I am dazzled by you, and
see my life entirely different now.
Its like I’m a whole new person.
I am blinded as I saw you’re beauty,
You’re like a winter rose of immortal grace.
I am defeated as I heard the beautiful harmony,
of the affair of the heart.
You are my light that keeps away the darkness.
The only reason for my being now,
is you.
It for my book. A boy writes a poem to a girl he loves. What do you think? Don't like it? How can I improve it?
My life seems incomplete without your enticing voice.
You're presence intoxicates me,
its like dying and coming back to life,
you being the one I see first.
I am dazzled by you, and
see my life entirely different now.
Its like I’m a whole new person.
I am blinded as I saw you’re beauty,
You’re like a winter rose of immortal grace.
I am defeated as I heard the beautiful harmony,
of the affair of the heart.
You are my light that keeps away the darkness.
The only reason for my being now,
is you.
It for my book. A boy writes a poem to a girl he loves. What do you think? Don't like it? How can I improve it?