Is this a good starting to a book?

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A screech of pain shook the house.
“Tell me again why we had to take that filthy… bloodsucker in.” I asked my master.
“We couldn’t leave him out there to die.” He seemed so much calmer about the whole situation.
“We’re arch enemies, in general, we’re supposed to want them dead.” I argued.
“Don’t talk like that. He doesn’t know what he is yet, chances are the transformation is very painful.”
“I can tell… he’s been screaming for over an hour…” I paused. “Can’t we just give him a painkiller or something, then tape his mouth shut?” I imagined a thirteen-year-old boy with yellow hair, red eyes, and two big sharp teeth sticking out from under some tape, him lying on the ground, trying to scream, and wanting his mommy.
“No. Painkillers don’t work right with vampires. He’d chew through the tape without even having to try, you know that.”



Would you need more to determine if it was a good starting or not?
 
Isn't this idea technically from Twilight?

You know, people get a PAINFUL tranformation, and I'm guessin the girl and aster are werewolves?


but, all in all, yeah
 
Is this a good START to a book?

Hmm. I don't know. Maybe a second chapter start?
 
it is very good, like, extremely good, but it sounds a little too much like the twilight saga....
 
another vampire story?!?!?! wow Yes, Twilight was awesome, but other stories about vampire annoy me.

anyway I think its a good start.
 
vampire books are so getting old
i was tired of reading them after anne rice

i am guessing you read eclipse and the etc's

but i guess for a same old same old vampire start it is decent
 
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