Is this a good poem so far?

Demi

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Am i just a girl to you?
Or do i have meaning?
Youve seem to find interest,
but looks are always deceiving.
All our conversations,
have been defined differently.
I feel like every word youve said,
has been spoken hypocritically.
You go and tell your boys one thing,
then tell me the total opposite.
You always make me feel bad,
when i decide to throw a fit.
You got me, cause your love felt enduring.
Well fuck it, cause it was never assuring.
What do i look like? Im not your little toy dude.
You cant just put me away,
and play me when you want to.
I worte this at like four in the morning last night, i was half asleep, and i guess i started to write a poem! Its not finished, and im not too sure if it makes much sense. Can you tell me what you think about it? And what you think it means ?
 
It seems like prose to me. Yes, you need to work on it, my dear.
It is anger that I smell here. Nothing wrong with that, but I should do more than smelling it. I should read words that make me feel it, read it, yet with no words censured. So, you could skip that one and replace it with something else. Good luck with it.
 
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