is this a good Poem ? or what ever its called?

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koolrthnnkoolaid

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when i think of you my heart melts,when i hear your name my ear crackle with your love and affection,buht when i hear your voices every boby else blanks out,baby i dont know how to tell you that i miss you and love you,buht you acting this way were not going to solve nothing cause love is like a puzzle when you put the right pieces together the rest of it is easy,when you touch me i fell so loved that any one who looks at use together seems jealous to me beacus they dont have what we have.you complete me,your the only person i will ever open my heart to,if you lived to 100 years old i would wann live 100 years old and a day younger so i can die knowing that you loved me the same way i loved you these past 100 years of our lives..
 
yeah, it's good, but in the fourth line it should be " anything" not nothing. it's a double negative.
 
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