Is this a good haiku?

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L’amour
L’amour n’est complexe
elle exige un espirit empty
et un coeur present

-translated-

Love
Love is not complex
It demands an empty mind
and a present heart
Plz Remember, This is a HAIKU so 5-7-5
 
Just saying, traditional haikus don't have the title in the actual poem.
And they normally don't start with nouns.

Also, isn't the second line 8 syllables?

elle ex-ige un es-pirit emp-ty
 
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