Is there anything i can do with my poetry besides just keep it locked up and safe?

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i am 13. i write poetry constantly. it is my passion. its not just words and letters but meenings and its like its own little wold. i love poetry and nothing could ever chnge that. but i would like to do something more with it. does any1 no what i could do? here are some pieces i wrote myself.....




here are some short ones.....
Slowly Slipping:

He Slowly Slips Away
Just Goes Away Day By Day

I Thought I Would Have Him Forever
But I Dont Think Hell Want Me Ever

Little Things Begin To Slip

I Never Thought Theyd Hurt Before
But They Hurt Even More

They Diasappear Hour By Hour

Each Time Hurting More Then Another
Days Like This I Wish He Wasnt My Blood Brother

Id Like To Take A Blade To My Wrist And End This All In Bliss.


This one is about my brother who is a marine(hes 19):

My Brother:
Youve been around for as long as I can remeber
And now I only get to see you about every december

I Hate not seeing you everyday
I want things the old way

We sometimes fought
okay maybe alot

But things have begun to change
And its becoming so strange

I Dont like how its becom
And its making me glum

But for now I cant wait to see you
It feels like time flew

No matter where you are
You wont ever seem far

Youll always be close to my heart
You always have been from the start.

heres one i wote about my x whom i waqs woth for 3 yrs and shared some very powerful emotions and feelings with that i had to leave because i moved 3 or 4 states away and lost all contact with:

Going Away:
Your going away day by day
I really wish youd stay

And its hard not to cry
"It's OK." I say and lie

3 years you were with me
It doesnt seem like that could be

You seem to have forgotten everything about us
Some say thats a plus

But to me thats very bad
And its makes me sad

You dont see what you do
And I'm Beggining to think "Who the Hell Are You?!?!"

As the tears begin to slip
I can feel my world Flip

You used to be there everyday
I just want things the old way.

(I wrote this after i got his # from a friend and he told me never to call again.)

And heres one of my longer ones:
This one is eh eh when it comes to length....

Taken Over:
It takes over your mind
It has to most of man kind

People think its fun to be drunk
With accidental thuds and a klunk.

They think to be drunk first is a prize
But i dont think they relize

It slowly starts to take over
Like theres nothing to be leftover

They mistreat it like its no big deal
Acting like nomatter what they will heal

But thats not true because once you get in a crash
Your life could end in a flash

They use terms like 'plastered, wasted, and faded.'
To me the term 'faded' can never go outdated

When I hear faded I slowly relize thats what your doing slowly fading away your life
just like the slice of a knife.
(i wrote that in health when we were watching a teen alchohol awareness video.)

This poem is in the viewpoint of a fighting dog in the ring...
Abuse Neglect And Hate:
What why and when?
What did I do to you?
Why are you so cruel?
Because you made me what i am today.
Courage at its best.
But all too willing,
Which makes me fought and be feared.
And now I cower in the hands of a moster,
He throws me in the ring.
Blood on the walls.
But i finaly give up.
And cower in that bloody corner.
I see you come over to me.
And I wait for the onslaught of beatings.
But Theres a pounding noise on the door.
And everyone Scatters.
Then I hear shouting,
It goes on forever.
Someone catiously walks over to me.
And something is put around my neck.
Then I'm led away.
I'm put in the back of some metal box with metalic silver bars.
They close the door and I relize....
I'm free!!!!
I'm finaly taken away from that horrible place.
I can feel something moving beneath me.
And when it stops I am taken to some white room.
They put me on some metal table.
Where I'm gently proded and looked over with the softest of touches.
Theres a muffled sound I cant hear.
Then I hear the Strangest words.
I can actauly understand them "Your A Good Boy They Say."
Its said in the softest tone.
I go to lift my head to nuzzle the one who cares.
But I feel a prick and before I know it,
I can feel my conciousness slipping until....
Im no longer there...
But I now walk along side god in heaven.

I would deeply apprciate it if no one took these i have worked very hard on them and i want them to stay mine. the last one plz remeber was in the view point of a pitbull terrier who was forced into the ring. plz tell me how i can go farther with my writing. it is my deepest passion.-
The 13yr old poet.
 
I love poetry as well. I feel its a good way to display different emotions of people and problems of the world. Your poems are very awesome! I almost cried at the dog ring poem. Some suggestions I have for you is to join a poetry contest. If you have a school newspaper publish your work. By the way you should keep a journal of your work, if you haven't already.You have talent and let it shine!
 
I didn't read all of them but the ones I did read I like a lot. They're really good especially for a 13 year-old. You need to fix some grammar and spelling but otherwise they're really good.
 
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