Is my poem good just be honest, please no hurtful words!?

sofie101

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Okay is this poem good? I want to be a poet probably maybe, but is this good?
Here it goes:

The day turns to night
we dance under the light

Our hands hold each-others
two graceful lovers

Your eyes sparkle like the crystal clear water
and your skin feels like a warm fire roasting in the winter

So we dance until day comes
and we will run

back into the night
to dance again
to make another night feel right.
 
I, like the poem. but toy need more feeling into it, reach within your self, be honest and let it come from the heart. It will be the best poem you ever wrote.
 
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