is my poem any good??????????????????

Rebs(L)Dale.

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it has already been copyrighted so dont even think about it..

i just want to know if you like it :)


i am an enchanted creature, and i merk below
the sea, deep with the dolphins, exploring my
underwater world full of corals and reefs and all
the other creatures, you don't realise how black
and white the world is until you mingle with the
colour explosions down here.
even though we creatures are different, we all get along.
we respect eachother, we help eachother, and
we work together to make our place a better place.
everything down here is bursting with colour too bright
for your eyes to handle,
i am mesmerized as i swim around and stare at
everything that's going on down here at the seabed,
down here, below the
wars and predjudice and differentiated opinions
everyone is friends.
everyday is a new day, a new start, when the
negatives of the previous day are forgotten, and within
nobody's personality is the ability to hate or
destroy others. we all give and take, everything is
equal and we all make sacrifices for others and
comprimises for ourselves..
the beauty of my reef sends everyone crazy in
awe, nothing else matters when we begin to enjoy
the beauty and tranquility of this underwater and
under-rated heaven. ,they blow bubbles upto the surface,
watching as their oxygen,
dissapears above them along with their troubles and
glistens in the sunlight which shines down onto the
water, a blessing it gives..
we dont live forever, and we enjoy every single day as
it comes.
i thank god for making
me a mermaid, a sea creature who's
existence is none but a myth to all other species.
who's land is not ruled by dictators or a dominant
organisation, down here where everyone is equal
and every day is a happy day. i hope they will
never discover us, i hope they will leave us as we are, not
interfere with our peaceful state, i hope i hope,
life will be this way, forever, because when we
live in this way, it is perfection.
 
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