Is descending rhythm allowed in a poem?

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Sandy Beach
by Sandy

We walked along the beach that day
watching our kids laugh and play
finding their treasures in the sand
why didn't we walk hand in hand

Your eyes sparkled oh so bright
I did giggle with delight
running, splashing, playing hard
fate would soon reveal its card

kids are grown, most have gone
Memories linger on
the sand between our toes
no castles built for show

in my mind we meld
on the sand I held...
 
I am unsure your intent by stating 'descending'. You have end rhymed with your lines. Usually in a structured poem with end rhymes for example, you would also have a set meter format. If I were to post your poem, I would simply combine all the lines to make it a free verse style. Just my thought. Overall though, your words flow well.
 
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