im writing a story Tell me if u like it be honest?

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Andrew

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it called darkness
aron was a normal 12 year old boy who lived with is mother and older brother calvin. ever since there father died calvin acted out so one night calvin suck out with 5 of his friends to trash the school. that night bothers lives changed 4ever that night aron followed calvin and the whole group of kids were attacked by creatures called shadows and the were injected with a unknown substance. they began to mutate and develop stranger powers. they both chose different paths and from that day on became mortal enemies.
well that's it if it whack say so if u like it say so if u r confused tell me so i can help but please please don't steal it i really want to go some where with this story so hands off
 
who chose different paths? - the two brothers? Otherwise good idea. Would make a good story for an old-fashioned style comic (thats good). It has retro appeal.
 
The idea is good, but if you want to write a story and maybe get it published, you're gonna have to drop the chat talk. And learn Capital letters. And grammar.
Other than that, good luck!
 
You need to spice up the plot a little bit, it's got potential. And checking your grammar and punctuation would help a lot.
 
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