im writing a story about middle school can you tell me if its good so far?

[pookeygirl]

I walked threw the doors breathless, i took one small step and i knew i was doomed. yes that's right folks im talkin about middle school not just any day of middle school it was the first day of middle school. I had moved to new york from florida, so i didn't have any friends from elementary school. Anyway, i went to my homeroom, i sat in the last seat on the last row. My homeroom teachers name was Mrs. Lumber. i observed her carefully. She had thick short grey hair that looked like a giant puff ball. She was wearing a long black skirt with a thin white blouse. Her fingers were long and looked like a dried out worm in the hot sun. Her nails were as red as blood nd her legs were long like palm trees. Then the bell rung, she told everyone to settle down and pay attention. Her voice was low and wea and when she talked she shook as if she was standing inn the ocean in winter. As she spoke I wasnt paying attention. I was thinking about florida. I remeberd walking on the beach while the sun was warming my skin. I wish i could walk on the beach one last time see my friends one last time.... I was lost in thought until i heard Ellen! I woke up from my day dream and said um yes mrs. Lumber? Did you hear whagt i said Ellen? yes mam i did. So you did? alright then miss Ellen what did i say? i gulped hard when i heard this, my cheeks turned rosey red. Now I was the one whowas shaking like i was in the ocean in winter. Finally I said, Im sorry i dont know She slaped a ruler so hard on my desk i thought it would snap She said pay attention! the other kids laughed. I sank low in my seat. She handed out the seduals I rayed befour i got mine I said, God i hate new york why did you do this to me i want to go back please take me home... I stoped because i got my sedual. I analized it and turned my head like a hopeless puppy. I was so confuesed. I looked up at the clock homeroom would be over soon. then the bell rung I got out of my seat. The worst day of my life had offically begun

hey this is kinda like the 1st chapter yeah so mae suggestions comments all that stuff and tel me if it good or bad i will be writing more later