I'm writing a book, and I know my grammars not right, will you please correct it for me, here's the first paragraph, I know its long but please help.
HERO'S ARE FOREVER.
Written by M.A.T.
Chapter 1
Killer gas?
Scene 1
"I love you" She said as she was about to walk into the chamber. "Are you sure you want to do this?" He said. She just looked at him and smiled. "The chances of survival are one in a-" Interupting him by putting her hand over his mouth she says "I want to do this, I have to do this" With his head down he looks up with a smile and says "I know, its just the thought of losing you, the love of my life the-" Interupted again this time by a voice that says "Todd, Macy we need to start the chamber soon" They both look over at their secretary standing by the door, then the secretary smiles and says "I'll wait for you out here Todd" Macy Johnson looks into her husband eyes and says "I guess I have to get in now" With tears in his eyes Todd Johnson looked at his wife and said "I know" and kissed her. Todd looked at his wife as she was slowly backing into the chamber with tears in her eyes knowing that he may never talk to her again he whispered just loud enough for her to hear "I love you" then he turned around and walked through the door where his secretary was, as he entered, looking up his secretary said "Do you think she'll be alright?" Staring through the window at his wife standing there in the chamber, Todd doesn't even look down and answers, "I don't know, the whole world depends on the results of this test, If she lives the world will have a gas that can knock people unconcious for hours without even harming them, If she dies," he looks down sadly "Then that means we failed and not only did we fail, but we lose one of the worlds greatest minds, and not only that, but I lose the love of my life" The secretary whose known Todd and Macy since Highschool, nearly ten years ago, looks at him and says "Maybe we shouldn't g-" Todd who still hasn't taken his eyes off Macy interupts her and says "We have to go though with this Marie, the whole world depends on it" looking up at Todd, probably the best friend she ever could of had Marie says "Then I'll do it" Todd finally taking his eyes off the chamber looks at his dear friend trying to speak, but for some reason can't. "She's my best friend, and as you just said, the love of your life, if she dies then I don't know if we could move on" Marie says with tears in her eyes. Todd looking at his friend crying says "She's the only one that can do this" then he presses the button that starts the machine and says "And as for moving on," He pauses and looks up at Macy as gas fills the chamber "Everybody can move on" he says with sadness in his voice.
HERO'S ARE FOREVER.
Written by M.A.T.
Chapter 1
Killer gas?
Scene 1
"I love you" She said as she was about to walk into the chamber. "Are you sure you want to do this?" He said. She just looked at him and smiled. "The chances of survival are one in a-" Interupting him by putting her hand over his mouth she says "I want to do this, I have to do this" With his head down he looks up with a smile and says "I know, its just the thought of losing you, the love of my life the-" Interupted again this time by a voice that says "Todd, Macy we need to start the chamber soon" They both look over at their secretary standing by the door, then the secretary smiles and says "I'll wait for you out here Todd" Macy Johnson looks into her husband eyes and says "I guess I have to get in now" With tears in his eyes Todd Johnson looked at his wife and said "I know" and kissed her. Todd looked at his wife as she was slowly backing into the chamber with tears in her eyes knowing that he may never talk to her again he whispered just loud enough for her to hear "I love you" then he turned around and walked through the door where his secretary was, as he entered, looking up his secretary said "Do you think she'll be alright?" Staring through the window at his wife standing there in the chamber, Todd doesn't even look down and answers, "I don't know, the whole world depends on the results of this test, If she lives the world will have a gas that can knock people unconcious for hours without even harming them, If she dies," he looks down sadly "Then that means we failed and not only did we fail, but we lose one of the worlds greatest minds, and not only that, but I lose the love of my life" The secretary whose known Todd and Macy since Highschool, nearly ten years ago, looks at him and says "Maybe we shouldn't g-" Todd who still hasn't taken his eyes off Macy interupts her and says "We have to go though with this Marie, the whole world depends on it" looking up at Todd, probably the best friend she ever could of had Marie says "Then I'll do it" Todd finally taking his eyes off the chamber looks at his dear friend trying to speak, but for some reason can't. "She's my best friend, and as you just said, the love of your life, if she dies then I don't know if we could move on" Marie says with tears in her eyes. Todd looking at his friend crying says "She's the only one that can do this" then he presses the button that starts the machine and says "And as for moving on," He pauses and looks up at Macy as gas fills the chamber "Everybody can move on" he says with sadness in his voice.