im trying to wrtie a book, i hav the first chapte rwritten out, coud i have some

feedback on this chapter ? and how to mak it better

I was a pretty good basketball player. I could shoot with unlimited range. I thought I would be able to train myself and become an extrememly talented NBA player later in life. I did not expect to be playing in the nba game at age 13. Confusing, let me explain.

I was the captain of th middle school basketball team at Oak Meadows in the middle of an so far undefeated season. The local Nba Team – the Los Angeles Lakers were hosting a competion in which the winner would get to play 1 game in the nba finals for the team . I thought this competition was right up my alley so I entered.

Not to brag, it wasn’t really a competition, seeing as no one else could make a shot, so this was a dream come true to me, being able to play for the Lakers and show the world my skills. School was ending too, so it was the perfect situation.

The next day, I entered the Staples center and began my training two days before game 1. I was to get 10 good minutes in the game as Scoring guard. Now, I’m a risk taker so the day before the game I went bungee jumping from a bridge with the star player on the team. Looking back, it was a stupid idea but at the time with a professioanal I didn’t think it could hurt me. Boy was I wrong, we had came down, very close too the waters surface. We were coming up when the cable snapped. Luckily I was close to shore so all I injured was my shooting and wrist, the star wasn’t so lucky, he was knocked out when he olunged into the water. Everything went downhill from there, I was the backup to him, so I was thrust into the starting lineup and all the pressure was riding on me and quite frankly I aint an NBA level player.

I thought that my rep was ruined, little did I know that id end up making a game winning basket. But first, how about I tell you what happened during the game
 
It really depends on what kind of book your writing, short story or novel. If your going for novel than your going to need more detail and examples. Try to write like you speak and remember your audience, you need to write to keep EVERYONES interest.
 
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