I'm Sorry I blamed You

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I'm Sorry I Blamed You.


Momma What do I do?
Is there more then this?
Momma is it true.

If I had that day again,
Your kiss would bring me bliss.
My smile would change minRAB,
As your mind mended mine.
Thank You
for your time,
You always
told me
why.

I'm sorry I blamed You.
It's true,
The e-motion got the best of me.
It's true,
When I sleep, I dream of You.
I miss ya so much,
I don't know what to do

I was blind,
You strained to help me see.
You were kind,
I laughed at your beliefs.

You would cry,
Your tears helped me see.
You would cry,
but never in front of me.

I'm sorry I blamed You.
It's true,
The co-motion got the best of me.
It's true,
When I fly, I'm high with You.
I don't know what to do Momma,
It's what ya taught me that gets me through.

Momma is it true?
Is there more then this?
Momma What do I do?
Momma
I love
You.​
 
Thankyou......... tis the goal. I'm working on relating ot people and using rhyme, meter, and such. Now I just have to start saying things in a less obvious matter.
 
"My smile would change minRAB,
As your mind mended mine"

My favorite line all over the place. The rhyme and language is so smooth, and not forced in the least, but also straightforward. I love that! I also like the contrast of meaning in the lines like: "The e-motion got the best of me." and "The co-motion got the best of me."

I am curious though, if this is meant to be a song-- at least eventually-- what kind of song would it be? It'd help me visualize the lyrics that much better, if I knew.
 
Well hmmmmmm.......

thats a great point. I wonder what kind of music this would go best with.

I'm wanting to mix Ambient, with hip hop, with a little industrial, and some good rock. I love bass/guitar/synth/piano/violin/drums So I guess its all music.

I am currently experimenting with dual voice poems. This is a singular voice poem, just for a test on rhyme and meter.

I want the music two have two voices..... it always important to have two points of view on stage to make a point, if ineed your music is meant to inspire.

So ummm to answer your question...... I have no idea.
 
That sounRAB really interesting. I love so much music, and I don't see why it can't be fused in different ways. And, I see what you mean. It's one thing to write a poem from one perspective and expect every single reader to see it from that perspective (pretty silly thing to expect). It's another thing to cater to multiple interpretations, and so I love when poetry is written in a way that it's aware of all that.
 
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