nageshanilayaprathama
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wrote another so called Poem!? Once again, One questioner called rohinitnj asked here a question before 1 day ,in other India section ,in travel section .The question was –How much taxi fare from mangalore to kollur ?(Kollur is a pilgrimage place ) .I answered to that question today ,along with answer I wrote so called a poem !. This poem is also like my day before yesterdays poem ,not at all improved (.I am not yet able to follow your suggestions given for my previous ,so called poem .) Only good thing about this so called poem is, I am able to use the word ‘Metaphor’ here. Since the word ‘Metaphor’ is an important word in Poetry ,that is the only achievement in this so called poem. Can you delete or add few words or sentences to make it fit to be called as poem!!! (Summary of my poem is ,questioner need not engage in pilgrimage which is complicated these days due to selfish people everywhere who try to encash worshippers/believers feelings. Hence ,she can sit calmly in chair, with God in her heart. She can donate dress to poor women who suffer without dress to completely cover their body. This will be better than spending huge money for worship in temples
(You know how to look at that question and answer-click my name here –then look down in my ‘answers’ . Clicking for answer written today with ‘in other India’ category will lead you to that question and answer) Any how ,I have copied here ,only poem part from my answer to that question for your quick reference.
MANGALORE TO KOLLUR FAIR UNFAIR FARE AFFAIR !!!
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Oh, mother , Goddess of Kollur
Rohini, is coming , to Mangalor
To , start a , great tour
Towards , your , temple door
She ,doesn’t , know the fare
To be , given , to driver
Fare , may be , unfair
That is , what is, her fear !!!
Why she , should not , sit in chair
Forget, thinking , about fare
Realize , Goddess, every where
In her , heart , particular!!!
Goddess , say , which is better
Dress , given to , women- poor
or to , worship , of your
idol , which is , metaphor !!!
(You know how to look at that question and answer-click my name here –then look down in my ‘answers’ . Clicking for answer written today with ‘in other India’ category will lead you to that question and answer) Any how ,I have copied here ,only poem part from my answer to that question for your quick reference.
MANGALORE TO KOLLUR FAIR UNFAIR FARE AFFAIR !!!
_______________________________________________________
Oh, mother , Goddess of Kollur
Rohini, is coming , to Mangalor
To , start a , great tour
Towards , your , temple door
She ,doesn’t , know the fare
To be , given , to driver
Fare , may be , unfair
That is , what is, her fear !!!
Why she , should not , sit in chair
Forget, thinking , about fare
Realize , Goddess, every where
In her , heart , particular!!!
Goddess , say , which is better
Dress , given to , women- poor
or to , worship , of your
idol , which is , metaphor !!!