I wrote a song! tell me if u like it!?

[♪♫Dancer♫♪]

well its not done yet and the whole sttttuuuuuffffff like that is the length of the word lol


Broken
i am alone in this world
there may be people
but im by myself
no one understands me
or what i'm going thoooooough
i can't take it anymore
noooowhoaaa
theres something acheing inside
something acheing to get outtt
but i won't tell
i cannnnn't tell
i may be able to lie on the outside but on the inside i know its true
i can't change it
because its true
u may think i'm happy
u may think i'm doing just fineeee
but the truth iiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiissssss
i'm broken!!!!!
broken!!!!!!!!!!!
i'm living a lie
nothing insiiiiiiiiiide
no one to talk to
no one who won't juuuuuuuugde
and i won't tell
i cannnnnn't teeELLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL
i may be able to lie on the outside but on the inside i know its true
i can't change it
because its true
u may think i'm happy
u may think i'm just fineeeeee
but the truth iss
i'm (screamo)
BROKEN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

tell me what u think!
Thanks!

 

[izumey]

its nice lyrics, but it really doesn't mean much without music.

 

[o.O]

you seem troubled in order to judge the song i would need the actual music too

 

[brooke]

Well i like it! haha You sell it to Drop Dead Gorgeous or A static lullaby and have them sing it haha.

 

[Denver]

It reminds me of the poetry I wrote back when I was depressed.

its actually good, just not for me anymore.

 

[isabella14]

i like it its hard to try to judge on something i cant hear but still. tip ; instead of "because its true" i would put "because of you" but that's just me .