I want to write a poem for a girl i like? Opinions?

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Taylorr

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Doesn’t it control you like none other?
It takes hold of your conscious and follows nature, never nervous
Carry it along from red to blue
King of your senses, essential to dynasty, production is its main purpose

It expresses how i feel, but i think it may be confusing to her.
haha... its for a guy mabye? ..... acrostic possibly..
 
The red to blue part deosn't really make sense to me, might want to consider changing that part. What's worked for me in the past is starting each line with the first letter of the girls name, like if her name was Kayla, it'd be:
K (write something)
A (write something)
Y (write something)
L (write something)
A (write something)
 
Well, maybe write this...

I met a sweet girl so nice and so kind
A positive heart and a very happy mind
She was very attractive, and my attention was caught
And I felt content, a lot and a lot
She had very cute eyes and a very bright smile
Sometimes I would watch her, for a very short while
My heart was feeling happy, and the feeling for her then came
My feelings for her were real, it was not a trick or game
And so I decided I should tell her what she really meant to me
A very special girl, as happy as can be...

I write poems too, hope it helped :)))
 
way to cheesy, not the poem itself, but writing a poem for a girl. you can show it to her, but don't tell her you wrote it for her, it will just make an ackward moment where she won't know what to say so she will try to make it seem that she thinks it's so sweet
 
Yeah i don't get it at all. Try expressing how you feel by not using other words to relate to her. But actually writing down exactly what you feel about her.
 
I think poetry that's meaning is so deep within your own feelings may be more than she
is able to figure out without an explanation. Simplify..or explain it to her as you read it and then it becomes romantic...if that is what you're going for. It's nice, but deep...
 
Yeah it's a tad confusing. If it's for her, it has to be something you know she'll relate to and understand. Otherwise, it's pointless. Don't weird her out, woo her.
 
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