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i need help on improving this poem as an assignment for school becuz right now , im failing...
use to write poetry when i was younger, use to be really good at it but... things have changed haha now i cant think straight = [
so help me out with some editing please
our lives have become so predictable
always doing what one is told
never being able to express
or let our true feelings unfold
brainwashed by others voices
being limited with our choices
despising who we love
stateing how wrong, and putting words in the mouth of that man up above
but their ignorance and pride
means nothing besides
they will never know true love
i really want to change the part where it says despising who we love... can anyone give me something similar that would rhyme without love at the end...? i dont wanna use the word twice ...
thanks for reading my crappy poem , i appreciate it
use to write poetry when i was younger, use to be really good at it but... things have changed haha now i cant think straight = [
so help me out with some editing please
our lives have become so predictable
always doing what one is told
never being able to express
or let our true feelings unfold
brainwashed by others voices
being limited with our choices
despising who we love
stateing how wrong, and putting words in the mouth of that man up above
but their ignorance and pride
means nothing besides
they will never know true love
i really want to change the part where it says despising who we love... can anyone give me something similar that would rhyme without love at the end...? i dont wanna use the word twice ...
thanks for reading my crappy poem , i appreciate it