The Artist :)
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I just wrote this poem, and I am an amateur. it's that type of poem that doesn't rhyme but I really want it to flow and have the same stature all the way through, and if you have any ideas of how to tweak it a little I would be glad to have it. It would also be nice to have constructive criticism.
Wandering through the trees with a twisted path afoot
Nothing stops my trail of life, till my path is torn in two
Where will I go? Will I like it there or the friends and fiends i meet?
They both beckon me yet neither looks safe, but i know i must choose
One leads to happiness in a world filled with lies
the other is a dark and demeaning but it's ending is good
I set there wanting to know which fate to embrace
I wait there needing a pal, I'm afraid to do it alone
No one comes, I must choose one now
I abandon all hope and travel that darkening road
With fake friends and family in a world of lies
I would never be happy, that is why I now travel alone
Wandering through the trees with a twisted path afoot
Nothing stops my trail of life, till my path is torn in two
Where will I go? Will I like it there or the friends and fiends i meet?
They both beckon me yet neither looks safe, but i know i must choose
One leads to happiness in a world filled with lies
the other is a dark and demeaning but it's ending is good
I set there wanting to know which fate to embrace
I wait there needing a pal, I'm afraid to do it alone
No one comes, I must choose one now
I abandon all hope and travel that darkening road
With fake friends and family in a world of lies
I would never be happy, that is why I now travel alone