I need help finishing/fixing this poem that I'm trying to write?

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My heart is made of stone,
You will find the darkness there,
I don't want to be alone,
But my fear is hard to bear.

It cloaks me from the living,
Makes me envy all the dead,
I'm stuck somewhere in nothing,
Over hopeless paths I tread.

Now a mask becomes my shield,
Though I haven't figured why,
Maybe all I am revealed,
Is just an artificial lie.

Don't think you've ever known me,
I am locked behind a door,
I am searching for the key,
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Or I might get rid of the last two stanzas. I'm not sure. What do you think, too depressing, too sucky?? lol
 
Just end with two lines of the last stanza, if you are not very particular about the rhyme and length.

I am locked behind a door,
I am searching for the key,
 
something with more maybe?
like
i dread to look no more
? haa
but other than that, i think its good
 
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