Ok, here's a poem I wrote about my idol. I'm not trying to write a great work of art or anything. I'm just trying to prove my point and spread my ideas. I just need to know if it's correct. Any suggestions?Thanks for your help!
What happened to my idol?
Your voice isn't beautiful. It isn't soft.
Through the techno music your voice is lost.
My idol now looks like a whore.
There's nothing original, it's such a bore.
She's lost some fans. Only men want to see
how much skin she'll show on national TV.
Goddess on stage, don't tear your clothes free.
Show us what used to be originality.
Let's see those hips, let's hear those songs.
Your are still my idol don't get me wrong.
When you're on stage you show us who you are.
You show the world you aren't just any pop star.
Don't go with the flow or what the media will show.
Dance for yourself and not for the guys.
Don't strip those clothes off,
for money or for a prize.
You're worth more than that I'm not telling lies.
Bring back your lyrics, you still have that choice.
I'd like to hear your harmonious voice.
Play your guitar and bring the sweet sound.
Goddess on stage, don't let me down.
What happened to my idol?
Your voice isn't beautiful. It isn't soft.
Through the techno music your voice is lost.
My idol now looks like a whore.
There's nothing original, it's such a bore.
She's lost some fans. Only men want to see
how much skin she'll show on national TV.
Goddess on stage, don't tear your clothes free.
Show us what used to be originality.
Let's see those hips, let's hear those songs.
Your are still my idol don't get me wrong.
When you're on stage you show us who you are.
You show the world you aren't just any pop star.
Don't go with the flow or what the media will show.
Dance for yourself and not for the guys.
Don't strip those clothes off,
for money or for a prize.
You're worth more than that I'm not telling lies.
Bring back your lyrics, you still have that choice.
I'd like to hear your harmonious voice.
Play your guitar and bring the sweet sound.
Goddess on stage, don't let me down.