I know I'm no poet.. but are any of em any good?

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Well I'm pretty sure they all suck. I'm not writing these for any reason. Just wanted to try self expression through the form of poetry.

title: I don't care. Well that's what we're gonna say.
I don't care anymore
I refuse to be sad
You broke my heart
And you don't even care
So deny it all
Go be happy with her
I'll pretend to be happy
Though we both know I'm not

Title: This smile is fake
This smile is fake

Fake like the sun
Fake like true happiness
Fake like peace
Fake like friendship
Fake like forever
Fake like everything you ever said
Fake like our past
Fake like your reasons
Fake like love

Fake like YOU

Title: Like I care
Like I care if you move on
I don't want you
Like I care that you don't need me
I don't want you
Like I care if you never talk to me again
I don't want you

Title: I refuse
I won't lie
You hurt me
I refuse to trust again
I refuse to believe anyone
I refuse to be happy
Because you hurt me
You're a jerk

Title: Stronger than I look
I no longer care
Or at least not about this
Because I am strong



Again, I know I'm not a poet, I've never really been into poetry. And I know many lines in there don't really flow right. I'm not really looking for you guys to correct them all.. I'm just looking for some opinions on em.
I know I'm not very "deep". But not many of us can fully understand very "deep" poems. So I wrote to what fit me, and what I thought people could relate to.
 
I feel that these are "songs". If you had a guitar you could make these into great songs, or good ones depending upon the tune.

Not sure about poetry material it is a start. Keep it up and work on it some more. Look at some songs like "Louie, Louie".

Yours is better than that. Keep it up, you are on the right path.
 
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