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One day, I was taking a shower, and I had one of those shower radios. I started to get a little freaked out, like I was being watched. All of a sudden, my radio started to go a little crazy, like weird moaning sounds, and it wouldn't tune, and it wouldn't turn off. So, at this point, I'm totally freaking out, and trying to finish as quickly as possible. Finally, the radio just dies, so I'm relieved. Then, the shower curtain starts moving, like someone is hitting it, and it sounds like it too. I freak out, jump out of the shower, and run out of the bathroom. This was when I was about 9 or 10, and for a while after that, I would always bring my dog into the bathroom when I took a shower.
 
It was a typical Wednesday night. My boyfriend, Jake was at work and I was left home alone.
I didn't usually mind being home alone but tonight was different.
Things didn't seem right. The lights would flicker on and off, the dog would keep growling for no reason and the phone would keep ringing with no response.
Maybe I was just being paranoid I thought.
I decided to take a shower. I put the radio on and was listening to my favourite station When all of a sudden I saw a shadow go across the shower curtain.
"Jake,Jake!" I whispered in utter fear. "Is that you?"
I slowly pulled the shower curtain open.
Nobody was there I look on the floor and I saw some blood.
I ran out of the bathroom as fast as I could and then someone or something grabbed me I turned around and .........
"Katie,wake up!" Shouted Jake. " We are going to be late."
I looked around the room I was in my bedroom. Surely, it wasn't all a dream,was it?
 
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